Essay 1: Reflection

After receiving the feedback on my essay, it opened my eyes to how many details I was missing out on. I started off by writing down the feedback of things I could change or add into my essay. I definitely started off by adding more detail about my grandmother because she was my main inspiration to write this. The topic I chose to write about may be simple but it’s something that’s meaningful to me. I agreed with most of what was given back to me on feedback, especially about providing more detail, but I disagreed at first that my message as to why I was writing about this topic wasn’t clear. After I saw that feedback and reread my essay, I did realize I would need to add more detail because it probably wasn’t totally clear for my readers. In the article, “the makers eye”, the thing that stood out most to me was, “If the subject is not clear, or if it is not yet limited or defined enough for me to proceed, I step back and try to catch the focus of what I may say in a line that may become a title or the first sentence of the piece.” What I feel this writer is saying is that if you try to write on a topic without having a clear topic or details to fill in on the topic, it is wise to step back and jot down some ideas to see if you can make it work. Jumping into any kind of writing with no plan will often create a bad draft. With our first essay, I didn’t sit down and plan out what to write, but after revising the essay and reading “the makers eye”, I realize its important to take a step back to process the topic you are writing about and see if there are details that can turn your story into a good read. I did not use AI to help me write this because I don’t feel like having a computer generated story about my life knowing that AI can’t convey the emotions I felt and the things I saw, heard, or tasted. I like the fact that everything I write is coming from the heart and I love adding in the little details that pull a story together.